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Is that reference to a Martian Princess a nod to A Princess of Mars?

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We, maybe by a mistake, shot down their craft.
tramp over us like insects.
And we still don't know who we shot.
ape rituals of figuring out who's in charge

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The Military being reasonable in a sci-fi story?? Unheard of!

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"...but it could have been some Martian Princess taking a ritual visit."

Is what I see a reference to Aldnoah.Zero? Even more important, does this mean that the Major is an otaku? ;-)

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I had more of a "John Carter" thought.

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Ooh, right! I loved those novels, too :-)

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"Everyone here is dumb except me"

"I am literally trying to stop an intergalactical incident"

"I can do that in my sleep"

"Ugghh"

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I am sure that in his position as head of a major university, Zelenkov makes departmental funding decisions in an entirely apolitical and dominance-drama-free manner.

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First panel: second bubble needs to be reworded.

Second panel: first bubble, remove 'would', second bubble, 'send' instead of 'sent'

Third panel: first bubble remove 'did', last bubble 'until' instead of 'before' and 'we' instead of 'we'll'.

Really loving this comic. I can occasionally tell English is not your native language, but it's usually fairly subtle - you do a great job. For some reason, this particular update seems noticeably worse on the language front than any of the previous ones.

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Thanks. There's several culprits that might be a reason, I'll try to sort them out.

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We, maybe by [] mistake, [] shot down their craft.
or: We -- maybe by [] mistake, but still -- shot down their craft.
or: maybe the Major is just being a bit clumsy with phrasing.
Definitely shouldn't be "by a mistake", though, since 'mistake" here is a quality rather than a thing.

And I'm very interested that there [] be no conflict.

if they have managed to [send] spaceships
In a sentence like this the past tense is only applied once, in this case to "manage" since it sorta contains the "send".

allow them to [trample] us like [] insects

And we still don't know who [] we shot. It could've been [Cortes's] recon party.
A final "s" on a word only eats the "s" after the apostrophe if it's plural. I think.

And [until we] figure this out

they demand that I [participate] in their primitive ape rituals of [figuring] out who's in charge

if you would allow me [to] finish that.

No worries. I'll freely admit that English is a monstrosity of a language made from words and grammar that other languages woke up in a bathtub of ice and realized they were missing.






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